Mental Health:
This article overall was very good. It was packed with background information and a subject that hasn’t really crossed my mind (I believe this could be true for many others). It left me as a reader thinking more about my own RAs, how they are doing and how are they being affected. Especially living in a large building like Sokokis. Content wise, you have a good use of interviews. If I could make one suggestion, maybe try to get an RA from one of the upperclassmen dorms (maybe then have even more responsibilities/residents). Another one could be Sandy Hopkins who is head of housing and very easy to get in contact with from my experience. Little things that you could fix is that you don’t have to repeat University of New England or Resident Advisor multiple times. Your reader will understand the abbreviation you’re using after explaining what it means in the beginning. It will make it flow better. Still this is a very good article with only few tweaks.
Luke:
This is a good skeleton to your article. The subject itself is unique and something that you can draw from personal experience. Although this can sometimes create bias in a feature story you manage to remove yourself from the perspective. I think the audience is presented with a subject they’re unfamiliar with and it’s a light read for them. Something (soft news) enjoyable but not a pressing matter on campus like insufficient parking. The one interview you were able to include was done well. I think as you gather more quotes you make think to trim Gavin’s down in case of overlap in info. There are some grammatical errors that you may find when reading it over, mostly sentence structure and commas. Some of your sentences can be combined because they read a little choppy right now. Overall, you’re on the right path to have a good outcome.
Covid Restrictions:
I think this is a very optimistic take on the current situation regarding Covid. Its a soft news piece an audience would maybe feel more inspired by. In terms of interviews, it was very extensive. I like that there is a full student perspective on how campus feels, but I think a faculty one could emphasize it. This could be a professor, Dean Millen, Area Coordinators, etc. I can see that you do this a little with Jared’s position at the commons, but he also had the duality of being a student. I think someone who is removed from the student body yet sees them interact could offer something interesting. Some formalities in your feature that could be touched upon is your interview introductions. In some of your quote set ups, you explain what the interviewee says before they say it. This may be unintentional, it just reads as a repeat of information that could be more concise. Other formalities are when you split the quote to say he said or she said. There’s one or tow points where it reads a little clunky and could be removed. With these little fixes, this is a strong and interesting piece. I think it could be something that students should read, a comfort to know things are improving.
