The biggest thing that I did in my speech that I received advice on is that I made it almost too personal. I understand that a portion of a speech is making a connection with the audience, but I had taken it too far. This made my speech much longer than it needed to be, nearly 8 minutes long. Meaning that I was almost 3 minutes over the final speech criteria. What I have to do to correct this is go back into my outline, and simplify a lot of it. I didn’t really notice the fact that having a 3 page outline made way too long for a speech. My other advice that I took away from watching my video is making sure I stay in a superman stance. No wavering of my hands, swaying of body, or continuously fixing my mask. I found this VERY distracting within watching my video and I find that my audience would be distracted too. Overall, my speech did well but there’s little kinks that need to be worked out.
Journal #8
